Tough question. Go to the Q&A section and see how to send a PM (private message through the Inbox) showing the original and also your version. I would have to see it to give you an opinion. Address the private message to:
mops,rescuer,crafter2243,02kar,asterixsew,spendlove,jrob
Don't we have a moderator in Australia as well. I thought 'greysewist' was one too. Love Chris
She found that she needed to spend more time on her work commitments and was spending too much time here.